DramatisPersonae Posted January 18, 2006 Report post Posted January 18, 2006 I proshetaj se po groblju bez spomenika. Samo mrtva, siva muka. Hodaš, tražiš svoje ime, sa nekom svećom si zagrljen. Pod osušenim suzama potopljen. I još jedan dan odlazi, dok se sumrak spusta, Gavrani lome tišinu, tišinu tvojeg srca. ------------------- Ti hodaš, Ti hodaš mali čoveče! Tvoja noga gazi opalo lišće, Ali i meke vlati trave... Ti hodaš, blagosiljan da hodaš. Zašto koračaš kroz sumorne pejzaže? ...tvoje groblje... Iznad meke blatnjave zemlje, Tako poznata lica naslikana stoje, Tvoja ruka kao da traži... ...Hodaš putem popločanim, Pod kojim čekaju te... I iscedi poslednju kap svojeg straha, Zakorachi napred, tamo, negde nasred mraka... Zar ne chujesh zov? I tishina, i bol... Zidovi su davno skupljeni oko tebe, Dok sedish u nekom coshku, naslonjen od samog sebe, Grabish svoju kosu, Opala je... I pala je... U pakla ponore... Gubish vid, ruke stezu se... Gubish snagu... Poslednji dah... Izdishesh se... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elizabeth Posted January 18, 2006 Report post Posted January 18, 2006 (edited) cemu odvajanje onim linijama?(osim ako nisu u pitanju 2 pesme) Interesantna mesavina klascnog i modernog (ovde mislim na tematiku i jezik, posebno u pretposlednjoj strofi, ali ako se uzme u obzir simbolika kose sasvim je na mestu). Edited January 18, 2006 by Elizabeth Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DramatisPersonae Posted January 18, 2006 Report post Posted January 18, 2006 Ono ispod linije su gavrani. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elizabeth Posted January 19, 2006 Report post Posted January 19, 2006 a koji su naslovi obe pesme (tj. samo one prve jer si za drugu vec rekao)? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DramatisPersonae Posted January 19, 2006 Report post Posted January 19, 2006 a koji su naslovi obe pesme (tj. samo one prve jer si za drugu vec rekao)? Ha! Pa jado, ono ispod linije su gavrani koji lome tishinu srca... U stvari ovo sam napisao pet minuta pre no shto sam trebao krenuti na posao... I napisao sam to cisto da napisem neshto, poshto nisam nishta pisao odavno... Onako, usput. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elizabeth Posted January 19, 2006 Report post Posted January 19, 2006 aha, kapiram. ma opusteno. I ja sam vecinu novih stvari napisala za najvise 15 minuta. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DramatisPersonae Posted January 19, 2006 Report post Posted January 19, 2006 Kontam. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DramatisPersonae Posted January 25, 2006 Report post Posted January 25, 2006 I proshetaj se po groblju bez spomenika. Samo mrtva, siva muka. Hodaš, tražiš svoje ime, sa nekom svećom si zagrljen. Pod osušenim suzama potopljen. I još jedan dan odlazi, dok se sumrak spusta, Gavrani lome tišinu, tišinu tvojeg srca. ------------------- Ti hodaš, Ti hodaš mali čoveče! Tvoja noga gazi opalo lišće, Ali i meke vlati trave... Ti hodaš, blagosiljan da hodaš. Zašto koračaš kroz sumorne pejzaže? ...tvoje groblje... Iznad meke blatnjave zemlje, Tako poznata lica naslikana stoje, Tvoja ruka kao da traži... ...Hodaš putem popločanim, Pod kojim čekaju te... I iscedi poslednju kap svojeg straha, Zakorachi napred, tamo, negde nasred mraka... Zar ne chujesh zov? I tishina, i bol... Zidovi su davno skupljeni oko tebe, Dok sedish u nekom coshku, naslonjen od samog sebe, Grabish svoju kosu, Opala je... I pala je... U pakla ponore... Gubish vid, ruke stezu se... Gubish snagu... Poslednji dah... Izdishesh se... Signs of your loom I see Upon wavering surface of my sea; I didn't sleep, dreaming of you, The nights I wake, looking at you. Oh Sun! The Sun! Flying with arms open wide, Unveil your shifting mask, Let me drink from your cup! Sun. The sun. The morning dew on my eyes, I crossed the graveyard's path, I bore raven's yell, and back at him tell: Of a face I sonstrangely knew, Of a heart, that has a heart in you! Of a child of grace and so quiet With her love for the morning loom! She's shadow wanderers cast, Chasing them through the night, Chasing that place, where they stand; Becuase, wherein hides the Sun? -------------------------------------------- And then the raven stopped it's croak, His black feathers now are soaked Rain gliding down his beak, Spreading his wings, he looked at me... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elizabeth Posted January 25, 2006 Report post Posted January 25, 2006 ovo poslednje na engleskom, hvala bogu, vise ne deluje tako mracno... lepo je. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elizabeth Posted January 26, 2006 Report post Posted January 26, 2006 -------------------------------------------- And then the raven stopped it's croak, His black feathers now are soaked Rain gliding down his beak, Spreading his wings, he looked at me... moze li ovaj deo da se shvati kao prociscenje? da je gavran u stvari prestao to da bude? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Милица Posted February 5, 2006 Report post Posted February 5, 2006 Lepo... "Mali covek",poslednji momenti pred smrt i tisina-ti motivi se nalaze i u "Ka Svetlu" Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blinded by Tear Posted February 6, 2006 Report post Posted February 6, 2006 Ono ispod linije su gavrani. Crni moj gavre. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ivan_Creed Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 Previse goticarenja... Dajte nesto veselije, nesto narodno, nesto kao Rade Jorovic... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Helle Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 NesHto veselije!? A za cHim onda suze lijesH e moj Ivane.... ko mi te sad rastuzio!? Tugo neuzvracena.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feniks . Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 NesHto veselije!? A za cHim onda suze lijesH e moj Ivane.... ko mi te sad rastuzio!? Tugo neuzvracena.... Case lomim, ruke mi krvave Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Novaliis Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 Super vam je tema! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Sonja Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 ------------------- Ti hodaš, Ti hodaš mali čoveče! Tvoja noga gazi opalo lišće, Ali i meke vlati trave... jel ovo "Jesen u mom kraju" ??? cenim da je peti razred osnovne skole... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feniks . Posted February 9, 2006 Report post Posted February 9, 2006 Ovo sa Hogarom je toliko dobro da nemam reci Svaka cast! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
DramatisPersonae Posted February 10, 2006 Report post Posted February 10, 2006 jel ovo "Jesen u mom kraju" ??? cenim da je peti razred osnovne skole... Greshish, taj segment sam napisao chetvrtom osnovne, bila je valjda priprema za pismeni, a tema je bila jesen na selu. Buljio sam kroz prozor i gledao kako se grane povijaju na vetru, i eto, nastade to shto si citirala. (Ne shalim se) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zagrivuk Posted February 11, 2006 Report post Posted February 11, 2006 Ah, goti pa nije valjda da vam se sve pesmice ili sta vec vezuju za ovakvu tematiku. hm.......... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
blondie Posted February 11, 2006 Report post Posted February 11, 2006 Greshish, taj segment sam napisao chetvrtom osnovne, bila je valjda priprema za pismeni, a tema je bila jesen na selu. Buljio sam kroz prozor i gledao kako se grane povijaju na vetru, i eto, nastade to shto si citirala. (Ne shalim se) bilo bi strava otvoriti temugdje ce `pisci` kaciti svoje radove iz osnovne.. ja imam bruka nekih partizanskih radova Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alita Posted February 12, 2006 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 I napisao sam to cisto da napisem neshto, poshto nisam nishta pisao odavno... Onako, usput. Vidi se. Lose je. Sablonski i prazno. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Sonja Posted February 12, 2006 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 Greshish, taj segment sam napisao chetvrtom osnovne, bila je valjda priprema za pismeni, a tema je bila jesen na selu. Buljio sam kroz prozor i gledao kako se grane povijaju na vetru, i eto, nastade to shto si citirala. (Ne shalim se) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blacksunray Verb Delikvent Posted February 12, 2006 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 e, ne gusi kreativnost podsticanjem na neobjavljivanje ranih radova.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alita Posted February 12, 2006 Report post Posted February 12, 2006 Ko, jaaa? Ma ne ovo nije kreativno. A ni rad. Ovo je copy/paste Share this post Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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